Wednesday, 20 April 2011

Freedom in a box -- NaPoWriMo 7

This is in response to the WD Poetic Form Big 10 Challenge (write a poem of 10 lines with 10 syllables per line) posted at Poetic Asides. I think this poem will also work for the first prompt at Big Tent Poetry for the week. The poem describes what's going on with me this month work-wise. I tried to use words that normally imply freedom (like anything to do with motion, speed etc) to go with a sense of being trapped and words that are normally used to show restraint (ten by ten box) to imply freedom. Do let me know if this works.


EDIT: This poem has been modified, because the original did not always have 10 syllables per line. Thanks to vivinfrance for pointing this out. I used Syllable Counter to count syllables this time instead of the other program which did not work well. I don't necessarily like the way this new one sounds, but I guess I will get back to it another time.

Freedom in a Box

Deliverables! Deliverables!
Flying through deliverables, deadlines!
Relentless shooting at moving targets
Fast foods, frayed nerves, febrile activity
Racing against time's unstoppable march
Willpower playing hide and seek against,
well, you know, will-not-power! While I ? I...
From soaring tempers and rising pressure,
I seek refuge on the Internet and find
Freedom in this ten by ten box of syllables!


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6 comments:

sharplittlepencil said...

Agnija, this is my first time reading you; found you at Writer's Island. So impressed that you took on the 10x10 challenge with a take that brought anxiety to the fore, that societal "must have NOW" mentality. Great poem! Amy Barlow Liberatore
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/04/20/laptopia-ode-to-starbucks-haiku/

Agnija said...

Thanks Amy!

vivinfrance said...

Super poem - I remember feeling that on many a working day. You need to sack your syllable counter, as many lines are one up or one down!

Agnija said...

Uh-Oh! Thanks for pointing this out to me, vivinfrance. I will definitely sack the syllable counter and try to fix this one!

vivinfrance said...

Super poem - I remember feeling that on many a working day. You need to sack your syllable counter, as many lines are one up or one down!

sharplittlepencil said...

Agnija, this is my first time reading you; found you at Writer's Island. So impressed that you took on the 10x10 challenge with a take that brought anxiety to the fore, that societal "must have NOW" mentality. Great poem! Amy Barlow Liberatore
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/04/20/laptopia-ode-to-starbucks-haiku/