NaPoWriMo 5 --- 3:00AM
It's 3:00 AM and I am wide awake
Listening to the loud rumblings in my head
The wispy word clouds of the day listlessly buffeted
around by the winds of the conscious mind
have bided their time
and using the stillness of the night
have formed dark, heavy nimbus clouds
ready to pour their bounty out.
Circling around each other,
Dragging their oppressive weight.
Electrically charged synapses,
Snapping and crackling at each other.
Shallow-breathed and bunched up shoulders, I wait for it.
First a bright flash
Illuminating every corner of the mind.
Then the thunderclap
And then the sheets and sheets of rain
The fragrance of freshly drenched Earth
Wafts up, releasing a misty warmth.
The parched Earth is quenched
The page is written.
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5 comments:
What a great poem and I can see that huge storm brewing. The photo is a perfect accompaniment to the scene you paint with your words. I love the surprise ending and identify with the poem more after that. Bravo!
Thank you, Judy! I had fun writing this one. Almost felt like old times! :)
You seem to have used a modification of the Ulpreksha Alankaaram of Sanskrit and derived languages. Also it reminds me of Kamban's frustrated exclamation "Pozhuthu vidinthathe amba" and the Goddes's counter " ezhuthi mudinthathe Kamba". Nice poem. The rain merges into the poem; unlike in Ulpreksha where only a doubt (aasanka) is expessed. " Varnyamaam onnine nannay varnippan athupolithennu varnyathilaasanka ulprekshyakhyam alankithi."
love this metaphor of creativity !
"मुरझा न जाए तस्सवुर (imagination ) मेरा ,
जादू के उन लफ़्ज़ों की बरसात करो."
@Partha: Have not thought about uthpraeksha alankar in so many years. Thanks for reminding me of it.
@Varsha: Thank you. These your own words? They are lovely.
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